Friday, May 09, 2008

First Line Contest--veinglory

Hello all! So the question is, which one of these first lines would most make you want to keep reading. Please note, some of the first lines have adult/erotic content. You may vote for only one entry and the top two entries will win a $20 book voucher for an online bookstore. You may vote by comment here or by email to ERECmail at gmail.com. Please vote for your favorite by its number. :) I think I got all the entries but if I missed any just let me know and I will add them to the next contest.


  1. "How y'all bitches doing tonight?"
  2. Aneirin saved my life the day I met him, and saved it twice again before he finally killed me.
  3. C'mon, babe, please.
  4. “Miss Darling, at what point in our tenuous relationship did I grant you permission to call me anything but Edmund?”
  5. Mid-afternoon is usually quiet at a big cat refuge, but the lion’s roar drowned out Captain Russo’s voice on my cellphone.
  6. The apartment served not only as a trysting place, but a place of comfort and refuge."
  7. They met in a meat locker.
  8. Forever in a newborn stage, enveloped in darkness, and cushioned by a firm mattress, I dreamed of fireflies, at least my mind’s remembrance of them.
  9. The beginning of the end for Quentin-Andrew (or so it seemed at the time) came in the moment that he stepped into the shadow of Capital Mountain and was assaulted by a stranger.
  10. The day Mallory Lucius died they said the devil himself drove the carriage that took him to hell.
  11. Anyone who ever thought snow was soft and silent had never trudged through the bowels of Northern Canada in the middle of the night in mid-December with a thirty-pound pack strapped to his back and a hundred-pound thief complaining at his side.
  12. I'm upside-down and being stared at.
  13. The first time David Green saw Ariel, she was pinned against the lockers on the third floor, just outside the chemistry lab, being finger-fucked by a football player.
  14. The more you want something, the slower it is in arriving. I suppose this includes Italian trains.
  15. “What the hell are you doing?” Layna asked herself aloud and for the third time, she placed the telephone handset back in its base without pushing a single number.
  16. Steven walked slowly along the edge of the sidewalk, staring down at the occasional tufts of grass defiantly thrusting up through the dirt-filled cracks.
  17. Jared Byrne scowled at his hand-held crystal as he shifted on the flying carpet, trying to get comfortable on his way home from the University.
  18. Gerry composed Latin jazz tunes in his head every time he and Javier made love.
  19. Sunlight dapples the old temple walls, the ruins of a lost time.
  20. Christian Ryder sat in the dark, slowly stroking his fist up and down the length of his swollen cock.
  21. Holy Crap, he’s hot; the geek next door was seriously built.
  22. Craig grabbed hold of the hard cock waving in front of his face and fell back onto the sheet-covered king-sized bed, pulling Jack down on top of him.
  23. Tyris thought he would vomit.

21 comments:

Jordan said...

3 is lovely.

Mary Winter said...

#2 is beautiful!

Emily Veinglory said...

I'm going with #12

vanessa jaye said...

#2

Amanda Young said...

#2 is interesting.

Jennifer said...

Definitely #2!

Mya said...

#10 gets my vote :D

Celia Kyle said...

#2 :D

Raelene said...

#2 is the one that has the strongest "make you want to keep reading" factor for me, although some of the others were enticing for different reasons.

Linda said...

Hmm, since I recognise #2 and already read the book I'm not going to pick it.

Instead I'm going with #18.

Anonymous said...

High five, Linda. I’m also going with 18. (Emily, I already voted by email, so don’t count this comment vote.) Kinda odd so many people are going with 2 when it didn’t even make it onto my top 12 list.
Yeah, I went from 23 to 12 to 5 to 1.

Lynne Connolly said...

18, it has class. You learn something about the character, and that he likes sex, or at least has it.

Bernita said...

# 11.

Ashley said...

11 is the one I most want to read now, though 2 and 13 are close behind.

Kristin said...

Number 7. I'm not big on first lines...most of the time it feels like the writer is trying too hard. Number 7 makes me want to know more, it made me giggle. If it's a romance...I think it's a fab way to start.

J.M. Snyder said...

Number 2 appealed to me the most.

Kimberly said...

#10

Anonymous said...

I like #18.

Kim said...

I like number 11.

The Dribbler said...

Emily, I'm assuming we can't vote for ourselves....

I've seen #2 too many times before for it to have any impact.

I like #20. Although #13 and #11 and #7 were good too.

Kim Rees / Kim Knox said...

Don't know whether it's too late to join in... but number 11 for me.